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« Thread Started on Sept 21, 2008, 6:11pm » | |
Accepted. 
Name: Lostheart
Gender: Female
Age: 20 moons
Clan: NightClan
Rank: Warrior
Eye Color: Yellow
Pelt Color: Grey with reddish-brown ears, a black right front paw, a white tail, and white back feet.
Scars: One scar on the pad of her right front paw
Size: Medium
Past: Lostheart was raised in NightClan. She was always one of the smartest. The tricolored she-cat was a good fighter too. The one thing she lacked and still does was the ability to be nice. Always one of the meaner cats, she gained alot of loathing.
Personality: Lostrose is an odd cat. She is mean, bitter, and horrid. The she-cat shows respect to noone except the Clan leader. Lostrose is loathed by everyone in the Clan. Lostheart can usually be found sleeping, hunting, or hissing/spitting at apprentices/kits.
Rp Example: "Get out of my way you stupid mousebrain!" Lostheart spat at one of the apprentices. "Yes, I'm talking to you!" Her attitude towards the apprentices was awful. Hissing once to the frightened apprentice, she went to go to the Warrior den. All of the inhabitants cleared out as she went to lie down in the very back, where she would stay for her afternoon nap.
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![[image]](http://i36.tinypic.com/24d4rit.jpg) - Gingerpelt of MountainClan
![[image]](http://i37.tinypic.com/29c03yf.jpg) - Iceclaw of MountainClan
![[image]](http://i38.tinypic.com/vobu4i.jpg) - Lostheart of NightClan
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Karma: 8 | | Re: Lostrose
« Reply #1 on Sept 21, 2008, 6:26pm » | |
It's good except for a couple of things.
First, Clan cat names must have a beginning part and an end part. For example, Iceclaw is made up of Ice and Claw. Lostrose would not be an acceptable Clan name.
Second of all, cats don't get exiled for their personality or general behavior, just if they commit a really wicked action. 
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Leafstar
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Karma: 8 | | Re: Lostheart [The modified Lostrose]
« Reply #2 on Sept 22, 2008, 5:42pm » | |
Looks good 'cept for she was raised in MountainClan, but I'm sure that was a mistake from the last profile. Anyways, it's accepted overall.
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